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“Pool’s Closed – Kevin” (Part 2)

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A great start to get familiar with characters! Since you asked for it, I noticed that you changed from past tense narration to present tense. Also: “could see the dozen interesting stories in his eyes, another half-dozen
fascinating adventures in the way he talked, and about a few other tales
in the way he walked.” Awesome!

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